Changes to script
Black Voyage has undergone a few changes in it's script here I will go through all the changes and why I made them. I have already done a post like this but this one will be more in depth.
Script 1 - The original script ran to 27 pages and wasn't really structured as it was based on the White Death, but also involved davy Jones' locker and Monsters. This did not work in practicality as there were too many elements and no clear story. So I abandoned the project.
Script 2 - Black Voyage came back to life a few years later when I was tasked with writing a short story. When I was writing I took and concentrated the story to Jack the ripper, Blackbeard and the White death. This version wasn't perfect but it's what created the final story I came up with.
Script 3- After the previous script I decided to do some further research into Black beard and Jack the ripper. After this I rewrote Black Voyage expanding on the connection Jack had on Blackbeard and why and how Elizabeth was killing these people. Then after doing a spell check I wrote a new version that was the most detailed and final version of the overview.
Script 4- This was the first official script as the others had been overviews. I decided to just write the dialogue that will appear on each page. This allowed me to hopefully create dialogue that flowed and to make sure I got the wording right I looked at victorian drama scripts.
Script 5 - This was the first full script. I really liked this version However when it was reviewed they thought too much was revealed in the last few pages. I took this and in the next version changed the words I used and added and subtracted panels from pages.
Script 6 - This was the last version I did before the final script. This script was like the last just with the minor changes. However, now this is where I received the most feedback. The people reviewing had an issue with Jack killing Lesbian prostitutes, Jack's involvement in the overall story, the lack of foreshadowing for Jack and the overall story.
Script 7- This is the final script. I tackled the Lesbian issue by explaining it in the comic as she (My Jack is a woman) has ego dystonic but I expanded it to involve woman who miscarrage and the green sickness. This eased peoples thoughts as it wasn't directly targeting lesbians. Jack's overall involvement is addressed in the text of the comic and will be further explained in the next issues. The foreshadowing is included in the reimagining of the speech. I also included hints of the overall story throughout the comic in text and ciphers. However as this is a Zero issue to the main event I wanted to introduce the characters and the basics of the story without revealing anything crucial.
I hope this has been informative and have a clearer understanding of how I got to the final product.
Script 1 - The original script ran to 27 pages and wasn't really structured as it was based on the White Death, but also involved davy Jones' locker and Monsters. This did not work in practicality as there were too many elements and no clear story. So I abandoned the project.
Script 2 - Black Voyage came back to life a few years later when I was tasked with writing a short story. When I was writing I took and concentrated the story to Jack the ripper, Blackbeard and the White death. This version wasn't perfect but it's what created the final story I came up with.
Script 3- After the previous script I decided to do some further research into Black beard and Jack the ripper. After this I rewrote Black Voyage expanding on the connection Jack had on Blackbeard and why and how Elizabeth was killing these people. Then after doing a spell check I wrote a new version that was the most detailed and final version of the overview.
Script 4- This was the first official script as the others had been overviews. I decided to just write the dialogue that will appear on each page. This allowed me to hopefully create dialogue that flowed and to make sure I got the wording right I looked at victorian drama scripts.
Script 5 - This was the first full script. I really liked this version However when it was reviewed they thought too much was revealed in the last few pages. I took this and in the next version changed the words I used and added and subtracted panels from pages.
Script 6 - This was the last version I did before the final script. This script was like the last just with the minor changes. However, now this is where I received the most feedback. The people reviewing had an issue with Jack killing Lesbian prostitutes, Jack's involvement in the overall story, the lack of foreshadowing for Jack and the overall story.
Script 7- This is the final script. I tackled the Lesbian issue by explaining it in the comic as she (My Jack is a woman) has ego dystonic but I expanded it to involve woman who miscarrage and the green sickness. This eased peoples thoughts as it wasn't directly targeting lesbians. Jack's overall involvement is addressed in the text of the comic and will be further explained in the next issues. The foreshadowing is included in the reimagining of the speech. I also included hints of the overall story throughout the comic in text and ciphers. However as this is a Zero issue to the main event I wanted to introduce the characters and the basics of the story without revealing anything crucial.
I hope this has been informative and have a clearer understanding of how I got to the final product.
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